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Who can be a lyricist ?

  • lyricalstarboy's picture
    says: (12 Dec '09)

    CAN ANYBODY SHOW THERE TALENT , I CAN ,  LETS SEE YOU TRY :P

     

    Everyday,i see you, on
    turning ya computer,when you get home
    go on F.B.,we chattin all night long
    unlimited service,text me on ya phone
    messaging me, how you love my songs<3
    reply you back,with a smiley face tongue =p
    follow you on twitter,so we can get known
    you stay on my mind lyk a crashing meteor
    you so beautiful,im so pitiful
    you so vivid,your so digital

    Need a superhero, im your"Optimus prime"
    transforming through day,a knight in your eyes
    you a color that nobody can describe
    I look up to you,as if you were my own sky
    mine from the

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lyricalstarboy's picture
on December 12, 2009

CAN ANYBODY SHOW THERE TALENT , I CAN ,  LETS SEE YOU TRY :P

 

Everyday,i see you, on
turning ya computer,when you get home
go on F.B.,we chattin all night long
unlimited service,text me on ya phone
messaging me, how you love my songs<3
reply you back,with a smiley face tongue =p
follow you on twitter,so we can get known
you stay on my mind lyk a crashing meteor
you so beautiful,im so pitiful
you so vivid,your so digital

Need a superhero, im your"Optimus prime"
transforming through day,a knight in your eyes
you a color that nobody can describe
I look up to you,as if you were my own sky
mine from the "Hi", yours til "Goodbye"
your the one that taught me,how to be right
my words will always rhyme,with you by my side
a star that would shine,across the moonlight
you the pilot,im the jet,we definition of fly.

 

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AWil's picture

@Tay...real lyricists could really give a fuck...cuz that's why they are what the are...more where that came from
Sub-Conscious-Thoughts's picture

@Tay I think your confusing real lyricists with people who are serious about there work. I couldn't give a fuck if someone stole my shit, not planning on making a future out of it.
AreJae's picture

Hello how you doing I was just thinking how secluded I am and not included and dam where is my fam and man where is that man that I once called dad I feel so bad not as bad as being trapped in a cage from which he stands I swear I need a sage or just a figure to father in the blanks for me it's not tough to see I gotta be a man for me
TAY's picture

Real lyricists don't post their stuff online. They know why too... Don't let this ruin your thread though. Props. You're decent.
lyricalstarboy's picture

SCT nice nice i lyk alot
AWil's picture

motherfucking SCT FTW
Sub-Conscious-Thoughts's picture

The innocence is gone, and forever broken Hope is no more, tossed into oblivion Words of happiness go left unspoken As I stare into this emptiness I'm living in The love I can feel now is all just an illusion For my heart has blackened and turned cold Leaving me with a paralyzing feeling of seclusion Which only gets worse as the hands of time unfold The laughter in me is dying, just a faint echo From a time when my smile was more authentic A time which my mind can't seem to let go Because now I'm wishing I never left it Optimism is just a fading memory in my mind Slowly being swallowed by the pessimistic darkness Taking me over, causing once vibrant eyes to go blind And a once enthusiastic mouth to become talk-less I'm more of a poet then anything though.
Gramitoz's picture

bump peep the verse i'm a little bit off edge right now anyways lol
9Lives's picture

This is really good. I really like the part "Need a superhero, im your"Optimus prime" transforming through day,a knight in your eyes" That one was pretty cool. lol
Gramitoz's picture

lol i tried to repost the verse i put on here, just saying that this is my response, but somehow it goes over 2000 characters, which makes no sense to me.
AWil's picture

i mean...do you son...don't just go by what i mention...if you're satisfied with what you're doing now...by all means...keep doing that...it's just that title and possible misconception that had me going off
lyricalstarboy's picture

As the clock starts to tock and tick i gotta be on my prime lyk optimus broken heart rebel is hard to fix shattered into pieces, and lots of bits. gotta heal these wounds, inside within rehab is my cause,and na gonna quit first step to recovery is to admit start from the silent,then be the win nothing has helped ,lights just dim still bad behavior, and at the end release my flows, then i begin is that better? idk feed back pls?
lyricalstarboy's picture

also true,i try to be more "sick" then.lol lemme come up wit something lemme think. ;p
AWil's picture

thank you gram'...but i guess i also see where dude is coming from as well...though you can still have sick lyricism in and more subtle R&B format
Gramitoz's picture

wellll, in all fairness, if you post something like Who Can Be a Lyricist on a Lupe site forum, most people would expect you to come with some deep or impressive shit
lyricalstarboy's picture

true words from a true man * gramitoz lol yeah to tell the truth i love RnB more than rap and if you listen to RnB AWIL i think they rhyme softer and lil bit nicer lyk i do thats what i try to follow not all lyk you awil not lyk you
Gramitoz's picture

lol just leave him alone bruh, you made your point by posting your verse, and i made mine so we can both carry on. Most people don't learn by getting yelled at and told, but rather, lead by example. I just recommend listening to more shit you want to sound like. I just bump the Clipse, Lupe and Nas. Lupe is really hard to capture though lol
lyricalstarboy's picture

ehh owell you do whatever you want :D
AWil's picture

but the point is...you claimed to be lyrical...by what i read...you're not even close...that is the topic at hand, if you're too slow to comprehend the point we have been trying to convey. to be blunt...you really don't seem to have much talent at all...alot of those word didn't even rhyme well... get home night long on ya phone love my songs the rhyme just screams out...i'm a beginner...sorry that i sound like a dick...but like i said..i'm just being straight up.
Gramitoz's picture

LOL i posted some shit that i will probably just put out later, fuck the new clipse album gets shit sparkin.
lyricalstarboy's picture

lyk i said ,my rhymes are not tend to be all hood and stuff and you said "simple " right cause i rhyme for RnB not rap or hip hop........so yeah thats why im not swearing and fronting and stuff......=\
AWil's picture

nothing in your rhyme is considered to be "lyrical" me and the homie above me surpassed you easily in the "lyricism" aspect of rhyming....now lets get the the "punchlines" you i suppose considered to be good...(i guess you assumed that because you put specific word in bold letters) ummm yea...you didn't have to worry about them going over ppl's heads cuz they really weren't clever...you can be closed minded like every other nigga that claim to be what they're not, and pull the "hater card" when they get told the truth...your shit was simple
lyricalstarboy's picture

its ight,dun worry bout it.pretty good tho*ahah
Gramitoz's picture

LOL i actually wrote no disprespect in there, and a couple more bars, but apparently i surpassed the 2000 character limit :/ I didn't write it to go for your throat man lol, i just write shit according to what i'm listening to and what i see.
lyricalstarboy's picture

ahah haters give me promo lyk a girl yellin my name :D btw i dont tend to rhyme lyk" dicks and shit and think your so hood and fuck" nah nah that aint me man but lyk picasso i flow so rhythmic . so yeah ,sorry for you wasted your time filling your rhymes i lyk it tho seriously :p btw im spanish too big boy ;p
Gramitoz's picture

Yes Its Gramzz, with an issue i had to address, There must be a reason why rap is mess, It went from, rapping for stress, to stacking up cheques, Now they just rap like they have no regrets, Noo, they just rhyme, forgetting the substance, I may raise an eye brow, but its best to discuss this, Instead its disgusting, who i see that try to rap, In my mind, I see these guys i cry and laugh, And if I react, he better hope he got funds, I'll clear them all out, like Leons does, I don't see ya'll chumps, I'm not the guy you should fear though, Dudes can fuck you all up like you got divided by zero Before i get mathematical, i'll tone it down for bit, Whenever i hear you whack fucks, i frown on your shit, Whats funny is that they actually believe they nice, Real confident in the way they squeeze they mic, I bring tears, and I've had to a shed a few on the grind, I would make a couple flips just for studio time So i stopped flipping, now look at 'em dudes Cluster fuck of whack cats, can't cook 'em for food, Look, i refuse, to eat them and shame myself, I'd prefer to just crush them, like the cain i'd sell, Take an hour for a good line, fill the verse with fillers, You don't have talent, but you're sure your words are killers If you dogs is so hood, claim the block that you stood, Think you're nice cause stupid girls say "Your songs are so gooood
AWil's picture

lmao...you call that lyricism? well actually don't answer?/ he proved he's a dumb ass so there's no reason quiz him/ but while the topic has risen i'ma go ahead and rid him/ of this fallacy he's got up in his head like he's a christian/ or any other religion, i know i sound like a dick and shit/ but honestly if i had the choice to read your rhymes or sniff chicken shit/ i would chose the latter...cuz though you filled me with laughter/ i can't stand when wack rappers are talking that jibber jabber/ "i'm ill" oh really? well i'm Wil/ put an A before the dub nigga that's who got mic skills/